My Best Friend
Everybody has friends. With friend, they can share their happiness or
sadness. They also can spend their time together with friends. I also have
friend. He is my best friend. I learn English together with him and share our
experiences. He is my best friend since senior high school. I like the way he
chooses English course, I like the way he cares to other, and I like the way he
battle for his life.
When we were in senior high school, to be a good at English is our
dream. When we were in third grade, he told me about some places that offered
English for tourism. He said to me that he confused to choose one of them. He
could not decide which one was better. The next morning, he came to me again and
brought another pamphlet about cruise line and he took that course to continue
his school. In that time, I was thinking that he was really serious to learn more
about English.
Besides, he is my best friend, he also cares to others. When his
friend couldn’t come to school because of the motorcycle was broken; he will
pick him up. In classroom, when I didn’t understand about the topic given by
the teacher. He explained it clearly to me. He really knows when his friend need him
to understand the topic.
One year ago, he could not continue his study about cruise line because
of his disease. His eyes became red and he could not see clearly. Doctor said
that his eyes’ artery was swollen. Now, since one year more, he already stays at
home without going anywhere. As his best friend, I can’t do anything. I just
can visit and accompany him to enjoy his life. He told me that he has accepted what
God gives him. He will try to find the alternative way to heal it. He will
learn meditation method and yoga.
Well, he is really my best friend. He always inspires me and he gives me
something. I like his way to choose his English course. I also like the way he
cares to other and he gives me know that we must battle for our life. Although
the God gives us disease, we must accept it and try to heal it.
Your writing is good Agus. The organization and the mechanic are good as well. Actually you need to pay attention with the grammar. You can see in your thesis statement: "I like the way he choose English course, I like the way he cares to other, and I like the way he battle for his life." Actually it should be "I like the way he chooses English course, I like the way he cares to other, and I like the way he battles for his life." Moreover in the third paragraph "Besides that" should be "Besides". Overall your writing is very good and the story is inspiring.
BalasHapus